I continue making Haiku and receive paid corrections by mail once a year from a pro Hiku poet.
This time he pointed out that I should focus on one thing more.
Anyway I translate my corrected Hiku in English. I underlined seasonal words.
I hope you image what I saw, what I felt.
Avoid the three C's Kids go to school with umbrella against summer sunshine
Purification trough (Chouzusya) gushing, summer vacation
With a cooking book, make a Lebanon cuisine , using Japanese eggplants
Feel my aging, Old songs in my youth, and cicadas
summer curtain, cover the dust, with breeze
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